the unknown city -random story writing

[christian]

i walked into this unknown land it was dark around me and i walked along on the sidewalk there was not much around very sparse almost ghost like and i saw a man in the distance he seemed poor but i was unsure i tried to close on him but he would only walk faster away from me

i yelled at him and got no reaction from this unknown person

as we reached a crossing light he took a turn on the sidewalk and walk into a abandon building it seemed and i went in looking to find this person and find out what is going on in this awful city

as i walked into the building there was stairs in front of me and i could hear doors and open windows from other rooms banging back and fourth and i could hear the man walking up the stairs in front of me and he was yelling up the way

LEAVE ME ALONE YOU DEMON!

i want to help you whats wrong?

DEMON DEMON DEMON!!!!!!!!!!

and we raced up the stairs till we got to the roof and up there he was trapped and had no way out

and we stood looking at each other

I'm not going to hurt you

THERE IS NO GOD! ONLY EVIL


GOD NO!
and he then jumped off the roof to his death on the street below



what on earth would cause this person to commit suicide like this my heart sank for i felt i caused this persons death but yet i had no idea who was this person or ware he came from or why he jumped

my heart was now set to find out what was going on in this distressed city

to be continued.

[steelsheen]

Oh, my... interesting beginning- but take it from a fanatical writer, you need a beta (proof reader)

If you like, I could do that for you.

[christian]

As I walked out the building I walked up to the mans’ body, unsure of what to think of what has just happened.

I know I must get to a phone or get some kind of help for this person even though he’s dead. I can’t leave him here!

So I begin walking down the sidewalk and I hear pops in the distance- most likely gunfire.

Then far off I see what looks like a police cruiser, but something was very odd… instead of the black colors usually seen on cruisers, it was painted in red.

After a few minutes of walking I came to the cruiser.

“Hello, I need help. A man I was following killed himself. He’s over there down the street a mile or so.”

Two men then got out of the car and the one on my left said-

“Why are you not in service sir?”

“What service?”

“The City wide weekly service.”

“Sorry but I’ve just arrived here and I have no idea of this service you are talking about-”

“Sir please just put your hands on the hood.”

“What! I’ve done nothing wrong!” I was grabbed and thrown up against the hood of the cruiser and searched.

“Look what we have here a Bible!”

I was thrown on the ground and they beat me with there nightsticks and I lost consciousness.


I woke up in a bare room covered in carpet on the walls and on the ceiling. I could see that I was now wearing some kind of patient uniform and the door was wood with thick glass in the middle and it was locked.

And I heard near by screams

HE'S NOT REAL!

I’LL NEVER GIVE IN!

LIES LIES LIES LIES YOU’RE ALL WRONG AND EVIL!

LET ME OUT IV DONE NOTHING TO DESERVE THIS!

AHHHH!!!


I'm left unsure of why I'm in this place or what’s going to happen to me but all I can turn to is the Lord for guidance…

to be continued

[Aslan the Great Lion]

I like that last line in the story so far because it is SOOO true.

[steelsheen]

What, to be continued? LOL!

[falklands]

LOL I think he means

I'm left unsure of why I'm in this place or what’s going to happen to me but all I can turn to is the Lord for guidance…

[christian]

im sorry but im going threw other things at the moment

is anyone finding this stupid?